16 Feb PTE Writing: How to Write a PTE Essay
Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are good role models for children. Do you support this view?
Writing a PTE essay presents unique challenges. Firstly, you only have 20 minutes so you must plan your arguments and write quickly. Secondly, you are being assessed by a computer and therefore, you must ensure you include easy to see written discourse features it will recognise. To do these things we recommend that you:
- Use a simple four paragraph structure with a clear introduction and conclusion, and two body paragraphs
- If it is an opinion question (like the one above), either partly agree or partly disagree. As we’ve posted previously, this makes it faster and easier to think of ideas, and allows you to use recognisable words like ‘admittedly’ to express your view.
- Brainstorm one central argument for each body paragraph to plan more quickly and simply develop each one with an action/situation and an example plus consequences. (WARNING: If the question asks for problems or advantages, then think of two arguments for each body paragraph)
- Write a clearly recognisable topic sentence, and in the case of a one argument paragraph, join the two sentences together.
- The computer is sensitive to written discourse features like linking words and referencing and substitution, so try to include a range of them in each essay.
Note these features in the essay below：
Language to show opinion
Combined topic sentence and main argument
Written discourse features
Certainly, celebrities play influential role in society today. Some believe that their success provides positive examples for children. While I have some doubts, I tend to disagree and will outline my view below.
Admittedly, there could be reasons why their influence is beneficial, and perhaps the most obvious one is their success may well be the result of hard work in challenging circumstances. By coming from less privileged backgrounds, some sportspeople and actors have had to struggle to attain their achievements, and this teaches children the importance of determination and perseverance. For example, the Hollywood star Leonardo DiCaprio grew up surrounded by drugs and violence in a poor Los Angeles neighbourhood, devoting himself to studying acting and eventually becoming rich and successful.
Nevertheless, I feel that many of these people are poor role models for children, and the most compelling reason is they frequently behave in ways that are socially unacceptable or even immoral. When they become wealthy and famous, sports and film celebrities often think they are special or above the law, in turn believing it is fine to take drugs or treat others disrespectfully. A good case in point is the cyclist Lance Armstrong, as he used performance-enhancing drugs to win important races. As such, he lied and cheated to achieve his success, which is why, ultimately, he set a bad example for his young fans to follow.
In conclusion, although some sports and movie stars are positive role models, I think too many have a negative influence on impressionable children.